Proposal Response

Aging I am/ but not without wisdom,
and disabled / and in more ways, not –
unreliability / the state of my body
trending / creativity

Escape is proposed / from this hindering attitude
my oozing scars / soothed with tenderness
beg a stand/ that revitalizes
discover determination/ I am evolving

This slumbering/ now awakening
has become impulsive/ suggests renewal;
need discipline / new boundaries
to quiet the pain / still, I thrive

I am whiny / pay it no attention
self-mothering / not selfish
counselling bedrest/ a healthy balance
prone to coddling/ this budding creativity

need to shake off/ revitalize
this disoriented/ clearing
weakened state – / altered strength
escape is proposed / certain.

(This week’s challenge is a wild card.  The catch is to look back over recent postings and find the repetition, that becoming the prompt.  I noticed a repetition of ‘age’ and recognize a need to revisit my attitude towards this inevitability, so I decided to select an old poem which illustrates the issue and readdress it.  Left side of each line is the original poem: Proposal.  Italicized endings are the new response. Image from personal collection.)

 

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13 comments

  1. What a lovely idea, V.J. This turned into a wonderful new poem and I suspect it gave you insight of where you’ve been, where you are now, and probably even where you might go from here. I want to try this, if you don’t mind. I think it will be quite insightful. Thanks.

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  2. It’s interesting how one gets set in one’s ideas about oneself and sometimes revisiting what one has told oneself can be uplifting and helpful in seeing that one’s life is still evolving and full of potential. Love the weaving of past and present speaking together.

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