Slippers, perched at night stand,
twitching impatiently,
mark the absence of feet,
cannot appreciate the meaning
of unruffled bed covers.
Abandoned, a coffee mug
bemoans its curdling contents,
complains of thick brown lines
contaminating its porcelain shine,
has not noted absence of hands.
Chair, pushed back from desk,
in partial rotation, sits awkwardly,
commanding attention, disturbed
by its misalignment, has not thought
to ponder absence of body.
House, uncomfortable with silence
creaks unnaturally, loudly voicing
objections to the absence of footfalls,
automated machinery and incessant
rings, beeps, and chimes of technology.
I try to reassure them that the absence
is only temporary, that the man whose
presence so strikingly fills this space
will return, hope they cannot read
the apprehension in my tremulous heart.
(Gina is hosting at dVerse Pub tonight and challenges us to consider the magic in ordinary things. When my husband had a heart attack a few years back, I noticed how everything took on new meaning while he was gone. It inspired this poem.)
You painted the picture of emptiness so well. It must have been a scary time for you.
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Thanks, Vivian. It sure was.
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Wonderful poem using personification. I could really relate to the inanimate objects. I like the photo too. Did you take this and modify it somehow? I love the filter you used.
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Thanks LuAnne – I did take the photo. I like to play around with them, although I can never recall what I did afterwards, lol.
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I like these lines of the house’s creakings: “creaks unnaturally, loudly voicing
objections to the absence of footfalls,”
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Thanks, Frank.
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You have beautifully captured the tension of the unknown. Nicely done.
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Thanks Teresa
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This is fantastic… love how everything seems to fill with the void of his absence… especially touching to read the background…
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Thank you so much
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The tension build so well here V.J. I could imagine every sound and creak.
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Thank you. It was a tense time.
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I can feel the anxious vibrations in the words, everything holding its breath.
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That is certainly how it was…thanks, Jane.
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Loved this vision of fretting electronics VJ…
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Thanks, Rob.
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Transferring the waiting to inanimate objects is very effective, this is quality writing. Jim
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Thanks Jim. Even I like this one
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Thanks, Jim.
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oh my V.J this was incredible, reminded me of when my mum fretted that my dad would never return from hospital, she went around touching his things, I never knew why she did that but now reading your poem I understand, she was reassuring the ordinary things of his return and at the same time herself. the comfort of ordinary, the blessing of routine was what she held on to, willing it to bring dad home, I am seeing that in your poem and that you did the same. truly the magic of ordinary things keeps us connected to the ones we love when they are far away. thank you for looking for this piece and sharing it, it speaks on so many levels, the depth of your poetry amazes me!
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Thanks Gina. You have summarized it exactly.
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house as more than habitation, house as beloved companion, and you trying to protect its feelings. nice flip of the script.
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Thank you.
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Oh Wow, VJ–this is palpable, exquisitely done.
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Thank you. I sure felt it at the time.
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It came through beautifully.
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I get the feeling that this man is not coming back! An interesting take on the prompt!
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Thanks Dwight. He was in hospital for 19 days, having had his second heart attack. I was still housebound at that time. Very anxious. All good now.
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Wow! So sorry to hear. It helps to know the perspective you are coming from.
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True.
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I love the interconnectedness in this poem between the everyday objects and the worry…an avenue to reassurance.
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We were all feeling his absence – a trying 19 days. Thanks.
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Yes, it would have been a difficult time.
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You’ve captured the energy relationships between things and people – including human projections onto those things, projections changing as circumstances change.
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Thanks Jazz. The things we take for granted, mean so much in such times.
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