Grackle protests, his razor-sharp notes raised
against oppression of fog – unwelcome
wall imposing isolation, day hazed,
connections blurred, aspiration now numb –
quiet descends, even birds have succumbed.
(Written for Dark Side of the Moon’s 5-line poem Challenge: standard cinquain.)
I particularly liked “imposing isolation” and “connections blurred.” I don’t get out every day, but this morning I was on the road and saw a train bursting forth from a field of fog. It fascinated me, made me wish I had both my camera and the time to stop and take a picture.
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Thank you. It really does alter the landscape
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This is a tangible portrait of Fog … I truly feel the words ” unwelcome wall imposing isolation”. We have sunshine now, mid-day, following a foggy morning that was preceded by 2 foggy days. Something about not being able to see the usual distance feels very much like a wall.
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It sure does. This is day 2 for us
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I love the “razor-sharp notes” ..they can’t even cut through the fog.
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They can’t – just highlight the annoyance. Thanks.
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You’re welcome.
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