Concrete is cold, imposing
does nothing for aesthetics
At least we’re protected,
I tell the littles, ignoring
Snot dripping, slime
oozing from unsealed
windowsills, cobwebs
and bits of shedding pink
It’s the best I can do:
four walls and a roof.
Except the ceiling
is bulging, mold and rot
certain to rain down on us
While upstairs, the man
ignores the leaks, luxuriates
in his abundance…Momma
Said marry a rich man,
you’ll be set for life,
but it’s dawning on me
there’s more to it than that.
(For Eugi’s Weekly prompt: dawning. Image mine)
Thanks for sharing.
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Nice post with beautiful painting and great words…
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Thanks.
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My pleasure! π
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Excellent. Read it a few times, because there’s more to it than just the words. Good ending!
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There is indeed. Thanks for taking time.
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Powerful piece, VJ! Bravo! Thank you for joining in.
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My pleasure, Eugi. Thanks.
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Quite powerful.
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Thank you!
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I see a story of abuse behind this poem. It’s quite chilling.
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That’s exactly what it is Liz. Another one derived from a dream. Metaphor for many women living in oppressive situations. Thanks.
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You’re welcome. It’s important to have poems like this one to give a voice to the voiceless.
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I agree.
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Love these words
.thanks.
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Thank you!
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Engaging poem that grabbed with the first two lines.
I could feel the cold concrete under my feet.
Like the line split with “momma.”
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Thanks Michele. I wanted to create a sense of calling for Momma and then the dysfunction of the relationship.
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Mission accomplished!
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Powerful writing and lovely image! π β€
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Thank you friend.
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My pleasure friend! π β€
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To echo some of the comments above, that last verse “hits home” with both irony and poignancy. The painting is perfect too.
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Thanks Liz. All the things we were not taught as women.
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Isn’t that the truth!
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Love the painting. Its beautiful. The last para is touching.
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Thanks Keith.
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Pleasure π
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Wow, this is so powerful and evokes so much emotion VJ!
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Thanks Terri.
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Wow, that last powerful verse!
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Thank you!
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Gorgeous! The picture too…omg so beautiful. β€οΈ
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Thanks!
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