An innocent sip
too late
awareness dawns –
spiked!
Nausea rolls in
room spins
assailant offers
a hand, a ride,
the regal miss
shakes her head
wobbles, hand
held out warns
to no avail –
vomit sprays
victorious spew
depraved perp’s
plot thwarted.
(Unfortunately based on a true story. Even though she and her friends watched each other’s drinks, the bartender was in on the ploy. Thank God my daughter escaped further harm. Women shouldn’t have to worry about this on a night out.
Written for dVerse pub where De Jackson is hosting with the prompt ‘spike’. Also linking up with Ragtag Community – spray; and Fandango – regal.)
Well written piece. This part of life is unfortunate and so glad your daughter is okay.
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Thank you.
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My pleasure!
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I’m so glad your daughter is OK–and the vomit on the horrible man is a bonus. A young woman at the gym who saw the books I’ve written told me just a few months ago that she had been raped. Someone who was not a stranger spiked her drink–she has no memory of what happened after she got into a car with him. Of course, there are plenty of people who take advantage of incapacitated people without spiking their drinks–and that’s actually more common.
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Yes – it’s a sad state of affairs that men think they are entitled to a woman’s body. Still.
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Yes, it is.
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Poetically evil and redeemed from what was about to happen. TG.
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Yes. thanks
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Every day I wonder what is wrong with people…I don’t understand where these destructive impulses come from. As with everyone above, I’m glad your daughter escaped. I know several of my friends that did not when we were young and trusting. And of course back then no one ever reported it. (K)
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I was one of the unfortunate ones. It hurts to know that things to don’t change. Thanks K.
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So glad this story ended as it did, with the perp thwarted. Women should not have to worry about this, and shame on that bar tender for being in on the ploy.
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Thanks Linda – women should not have to worry about this is right!
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Such a bastard… I just hope he was peppered with puke… and a the bartender too.
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Hopefully they are stopped.
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I come late, and leave angry about those dastardly men who plot and plunder
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Dastardly is a polite word – thanks Glenn.
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Nice description of vomit: “victorious spew”
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Thanks, Frank. It needed a poetic air.
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The crap we sometimes have to go through as women!!##&&.
Good your daughter was ok. A powerful poem.
Pat
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Exactly! Thanks Pat.
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The very short lines are exactly right for this disjointed story.
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Thanks Jane.
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What a chilling story, V.J. Thank goodness for that “victorious spew”! I hope that both the would-be perp and the bartender are in jail now.
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As do I! Thanks Heide
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Thank God your daughter was spared from that evil and tragedy.
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Yes. Frightening lesson for all of us.
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It is sad when people have to drug people because they can’t get a relationship otherwise! Your daughter was very lucky!
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Sure is. Thanks.
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Amazing that you got that horrid episode into so few words – a “spew” of truth!
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Thanks Jazz – always up for a challenge.
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Oh my god 😮 Thank goodness she wasn’t harmed any further. I despise the people who are part of such plotting!
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Exactly! What is wrong with people?
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safety in sickness – clever twist to the prompt
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Thanks, Laura.
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I am glad the girls were in safe hands.
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Yes, me too. Thanks.
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Beautifully crafted, and am so grateful for the happy ending. Victorious spew! We should all have one of those–on demand
!
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Yes, we should! Thanks.
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A different take on the prompt, V.J., that drives an important warning home! Back in my university days, I knew of a girl whose drink was spiked with LSD – she never returned from her trip. I’m so glad the girl in your quadrille managed a ‘victorious spew’! I agree with Reena.
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Thanks Kim. This is certainly not a new phenomena.
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This is an excellent retelling, a concise picture of a horrid scene. Sharp, brutal and to the point. Great writing.
On the other hand, I got a chill when I read it was a true account. A parent’s worse fear. So glad for the ending.
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It is our worst nightmare. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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Effective reporting in so few words you took us there.
Much🌻love
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Thank you.
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Well written horror, and I’m so glad your daughter escaped “worse”…I watch so many true-crime shows, and this is a common scenario these days. Too much evil out there…
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There is indeed.
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‘Vomiting’ becomes a metaphor here – representing the disgust all women feel about these depraved acts.
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Yes – good point.
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Bravo to your daughter for her sweet revenge. So happy to hear she was okay and the bartender was arrested. Shame on all those involved.
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Thank you. Sad that girls have to worry about this.
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Yes, it truly is. Why can’t they go out without becoming some idiots prey. It really ruffles my feathers!!
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speechless at the depravity of the human species.
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Yes. On the other hand, another young man, who saw it all happen, came to the girls rescue and escorted the girls home safely and stayed with the to make sure my daughter was safe.
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the worst and the best and everything in between
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Yes.
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I can’t like this one. I love the form and the storytelling, but not the content. As one father to another, I know you understand why… It has nothing to do with your poem. I’m sorry for your pain, your child’s experience, and that people tried to hurt your family.
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I do understand – except I’m the Mom. ‘Like” is not the right response. Still , the message needs to be out there. Sadly, the problem only seems to escalate. I don’t know how we change it.
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Oh, I suck. I’m sorry. I was caught up in the imagery.
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No problem. I get mail addressed to Mr all the time. It’s my generic name.
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I have always thought the only reasonable response to sexual violence is for others to stand up and say “no.” In both example and word, I have never encouraged such behavior. I keep hoping that makes the world a better place for my three daughters. I can’t speak about raising a son, but I have tried to teach my kids that they deserve better and should be as careful as possible while passing the message on to their kids.
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We do the best we can by our daughters, and unfortunately the stats about women being sexually abused remains the same.
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Indeed. One of my favorite quotes references the words of Rev. Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr.: “The arc of the moral universe is long but it bends towards justice.” A friend was once reading the news with me at a retreat and said “That’s it. I’m getting my level. This arc is bending like the flatlands.”
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I like that quotation, and your friend’s remark.
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powerful.
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Thanks
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This is so true. A cold world we live in today. We all must be on alert wherever we go.
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Sad state.
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Very dark and sad
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Indeed.
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That is terrifying indeed – yikes. I always tell my daughter to be careful about her drinks.
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for sure. And never to leave each other.
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Horrific event. I hope she called the police and action was taken. No one should have to worry about that on a night out. My son’s friend had his drink drugged. He ended up in hospital.
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She didn’t call the police – was too sick. Took her a bit to recover. I read in the paper two weeks later that there were charges laid at that bar, so someone told.
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Hopefully the charges stuck!
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Damn. I can’t believe the bartender wasinon it. What a sleaze!
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He was getting $50 a pop.
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Perhaps order what they’re drinking and switch drinks. Could be grim justice!
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Oh that would be good. The girls thought they were safe as they guarded each others drinks. Never suspected the bartender.
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Good poem about a scary reality.
Love the words “victorious spew” !
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Thanks Betty. Such a worry for us moms.
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Unbelievable and so frightening. A kind of poetic justice with the vomit, though!
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Poetic for sure!
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That was a harrowing close call VJ… thankheavens for body reflexes!
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Absolutely. Poor girl didn’t know what was happening.
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Oh my goodness, VJ. This is horrific. I dread the day my daughter is old enough to drink. I hope that bartender got not only fired, but arrested. Excellent storytelling here, even though the subject matter leaves me chilled to the bone.
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Thanks. The bartender was eventually arrested and charged. But only after several women came forward to complain they’d had a similar experience.
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So thankful your daughter was okay!
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Yes. thank you.
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