Statuesque as a Great Blue Heron,
she wades silently, patiently,
her long-necked beauty,
and generous wingspan,
testament to a tender soul.
She dreams of a mate
who can unfold her,
carry her to new heights.
Rustling in a nearby bush,
she encounters a partridge –
shorter than her, and
rotund, his countenance grey.
She is drawn to the candour
of his misery, how vilely
he has been misplaced –
his wife and nest robbed by
another, more showy beast.
Pity masks itself as kinship
and as love does, she dons
blinders, ignores the fact that
he prefers ground dwelling,
tells herself she will adapt
to his packs, learn his ways
Once dreamt of a mate
who could unfold her,
carry her to new heights.
Her shoulders slump, and
she draws her neck in now,
wings forgetting how to soar –
she is diminishing in the
confines of a single field
while her Partridge mate,
remains a partridge –
only fatter.
(Written for dVerse pub, hosted by Björn tonight, who challenges us to use metaphor. I might have got carried away…oh, well, excuse me while I flock off.)
Great use of metaphor to perfectly describe a miserable but not uncommon reality. I like it very much.
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Thanks Christine – definitely not uncommon.
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There are too many partridge mates who are happy getting fatter settled… sometimes a partridge is happier with another partridge.
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Perhaps…
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I love this! very beautiful!
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Thanks
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An image of many a relationship here. Even birds settle for less than their dreams.
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Funny how that happens
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“Only fatter…”
very dry, made me smile.
Is she a heron though, or a snowy regret? 🤔. Love is never misplaced, though it can be a pain in the grass sometimes.
This is both tender and fun V.J.
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Hahaha- snowy regret for sure!
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Quite a fable. It feels like a myth. I hope there is a sequel though where she finds a mate who unfolds her.
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This actually evolved from a dream which has many other aspects. I’m still working on it. Thanks Merril.
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Very cool!
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You crushed the prompt with this one–an A+. The metaphor is so stark, it is hard not to relate to it. At 5’8″, I have always dated and married taller women, and I am a bit rotund, but I’ve never been in a pear tree.
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Ha ha ha – you can always make me smile, Glenn.
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I see my past, naive self in this metaphor of how we unwittingly choose a mate. Sad that she forgot how to soar. Nicely written, V.J.
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Thanks Olga – she was me at that age too, when rescuing a man felt so right.
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“the candour of his misery”…very good…”remains a partridge/ only fatter”….very dry and funny….uncompromising as usual! JIM
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Thanks, Jim. I think it sounds like something you would write – couldn’t resist.
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I love this origami reference:
“She dreams of a mate
who can unfold her”
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thanks Shawna!
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I love this V.J.- I have this image of those two birds in my head, together. Funny how that works out sometimes.
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Thanks!
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Your poetry is filled with beautiful imagery. I think you definitely met this challenge well. I love it.
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Thanks so much, Judith. It was a fun write.
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…dreaming of a mate who could unfold her and carry her to new heights… Very Good!
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Thanks, Dwight.
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Oh, fly away! Powerful metaphoring here.
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Lol. Thanks Sarah
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The whole poem is a metaphor wonderfully wordsmithed – especially ‘She is drawn to the candour
of his misery’
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Thanks Laura
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i like how you got carried away with this, it tells of a deeper story and the symbols are not just metaphors they are like little guideposts for someone who has lost herself and needs to unfurl her own wingspan, she never needed anyone to do it for her and to hold her neck tall and straight again.
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Therein lies the crux of the situation- she didn’t need someone else to unfold her
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it took her a few seasons and lessons to realise that, very good use of metaphors even in your comments and replies!
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Ha ha – they have taken over…help…lol
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I love the way you unfold her story.
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Thank you
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A wistful and rather humorous metaphor, VJ!
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Thanks Lynn. A fun write
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Good use of metaphor. And thought provoking!
Always at least two ways to look at anything … translating this to human choices, who can say if she would ever have found the dream mate … is it better to be alone dreaming or together adapting? (The fatter partridge sounds predictable, reliable, “grounded” – qualities some dream of …)
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Good points. Is there ever an ideal?
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Nice repeating stanza: “She dreams of a mate
who can unfold her,
carry her to new heights.” I like the idea of needing help to reach new heights.
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Ideally, we lift each other up, I guess.. Thanks Frank.
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Oh I loved this! 🙂 Never settle for less than you really want ❤️
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Exactly! Wish someone had told me…er, I mean her, earlier, lol.
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I can relate! 🤣
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Too bad she settled for a “patridge” mate, instead one who can unfold her,
carry her to new heights. Love the take on relationship choices and binders that we put on, in exchange for that miserable kinship.
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I might relate a bit to this, Grace, lol. Thanks for your kind words.
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