A single, blow-up bed
claims my stake
on this house
mostly empty –
dust remnants
of former occupants
rise at my passage –
I chase them
Renovation
will precede
settling in
yet, I will not leave
wrapping myself
in these walls
waiting for
the revelation
that this is home.
(Linked to V.J.’s weekly challenge: home.)
I like how you break up the lines…it creates a nice rhythm to your poetry. I think the use of “renovation” and “revelation” in the same verse/stanza shows good word choice. Since both of these words begin with “r” and have the same number of syllables, it shows a connection between the beginning of the phrase and the end, solidifying the fact that “renovation” is leading to “revelation”.
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(Sorry, I meant to say verses, not lines!)
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Thank you. It is very satisfying to have someone recognize effort.
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I can connect with these thoughts, many emotions are stirring though I am trying to brush them away. My childhood home has always haunted me, still stays with me in my dreams.
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Same with me in dreams. I wonder what we have left behind that still looks for us?
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Left behind a lot…each nook and cranny knows my dreams, my thoughts, my moments of sadness that I shared with them..here is an excerpt from my poem:
That cushioned my lonely moments,
That nurtured my sweet dreams,
That provided solace to my disappointments,
That gave shape to my adventures,
That inspired me to aspire high.
My home!
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Lovely!
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Very moving ! 👍
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Good pun!
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Enjoy! ❤ ❤
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After my divorce the inflatable mattress was my home too, for one too many months. 😉
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Oh…I feel the discomfort of that. Hope things got better.
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They got wonderful. Thanks VJ
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this sounds like a poem of discovery. Wish you the best.
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Thanks Sascha – I am always up to discovery!
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Best wishes on your moving day❤️
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Thank you!
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Happy moving-in day! I’m so excited for this new chapter for you!
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Thanks Terri. I am excited too. My husband has laughed me all day – says I’m like a little kid.
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New roots, new beginnings! ❤️
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Oh, yeah!
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Having moved some 18 or 19 times during my US Navy career, I so much appreciate the challenges and complexity of moving…and resettling one’s life. I’m so much there with you!
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Oh my – you would know. There is excitement in the new – did you find that?
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So much so…excitement, anticipation, angst…and a freshening. A freshening that life has turned a page, and moved to a new chapter. In this period of transition, my friend, I wish you all the best!
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Thanks, Bill.
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🙂
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